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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph compares the average per capita CO₂
emissions
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 in four countries (the
UK
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, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) over the 40-year period from 1967 to 2007.
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, the
UK
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 and Sweden saw a downward trend in their
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,
while
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 Italy and Portugal experienced a significant upward trend. In 1967, the
UK
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 and Sweden had much higher
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 than the other two nations, but the gap between the four countries narrowed by 2007. In detail, the
UK
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 had the highest
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 in 1967, at around 11 metric
tonnes
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. Its
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 decreased gradually to roughly 9
tonnes
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 in 2007. Sweden’s
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 showed a more dramatic change
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 after peaking at 10.5
tonnes
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 in 1977, they dropped sharply to 5.5
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 by 2007.
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 the lowest among the four at that time.
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, Italy and Portugal started with lower
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 in 1967 . Italy’s
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 rose steadily to nearly 8
tonnes
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 in 2007. Portugal’s
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 grew the fastest
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 they increased continuously, reaching 5.5
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 in 2007 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, uk, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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