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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph below compares per citizen 
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2)
emissions
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 in 4 different countries，the United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal 
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, during
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during
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from
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 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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,the graph
tells
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shows
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 how the United
Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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 decreased
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2)
emissions
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but
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, but
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other
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the other
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 two countries grew in 40 years. In the first
dcade
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decade
,1967 to
1977
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1977,
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 only the United
Kingdom
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reduce
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reduced
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carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2)
emissions
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,
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;
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other
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the other
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 three countries grew 
fastly
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rapidly
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.In 1977,
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2)
emissions
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 came to a head,
over10
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over 10
. After 1977,
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2)
emissions
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was
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were
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 lower quickly,and
was
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were
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same
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the same
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with
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as
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the
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those
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one
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apply
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in Italy during 1987,which
was
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were
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till
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still
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 increasing slowly in
this
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 decade. From 1987 to
2007
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2007,
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 the United
Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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countinued
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continued
decrease
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to decrease
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 their average
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per person at a close range. The number in Italy and Portugal still
rise
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rises
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,but didnt 
change
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changed
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 much
as
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over
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last
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the last
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 20 years.In 2007,
Sweden
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has
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had
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equal
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an equal
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amout
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amount
 of
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per person
in
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to
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 Portugal.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, co, emissions, kingdom, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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