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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 of Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. The per
capita
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emissions
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 of the United Kingdom from 1967 to 1977 were about 11. The decrease in per
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emissions
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 from 1977 to 1987. The per
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emissions
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 decreased significantly from 1987 to 2007. The per
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emissions
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 decreased to about 7. Sweden's per
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emissions
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 decreased significantly by about 11 from 1967 to 1977. From 1977 to 1987, the per
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emissions
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 decreased significantly, and the per
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emissions
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 were about 7. From 1987 to 2007, the per
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emissions
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 decreased significantly to about 5. From 1967 to 1977, the per
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 in Italy was about 11.
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 unstable decline from 1987 to 2007, the per
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emissions
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was
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 about 5. In 1987, the per
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dioxide
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emissions
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 of Italians were the same as those in
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. Portugal showed a stable increase in per
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 from 1967 to 1987. There was no change from 1997 to 2007. The per
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carbon
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 was about 5

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Vocabulary: Replace the words capita, carbon, dioxide, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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