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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph compares the average carbon dioxide
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 per person in the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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, the
UK
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 consistently produced the highest CO2
emissions
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 per capita （11 metric
tonnes
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）, and its figures declined steadily over the period
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besides
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 that
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Sweden
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, Sweden
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 started at the
secondly
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anount
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amount
which
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, which
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 is higher than 8 metric
tonnes
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the
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, the
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 same as the
UK
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, followed by a marked decrease.
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, Portugal and Italy started with relatively low
emissions
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 but experienced significant growth. In 1977, the
UK
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’s per capita
emissions
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 were about 11 metric
tonnes
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, the highest among the four countries, and declined gradually to roughly 9
tonnes
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 in 1997.
Sweden
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 reached a peak in 1977 (10.5
meric
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metric
tonnes
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) and followed a
suddenly decreasing
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 to almost 7 in 1987;
moreover
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, it
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 with Italy in 1987. Italy’s
emissions
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 rose steadily from around 4
tonnes
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 in 1967 to nearly 8
tonnes
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 by 1997, after which they
stabilized
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. Portugal had the lowest starting point at about 1.2
tonnes
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 in 1967, but saw continuous growth, reaching slightly above 5
tonnes
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 by 1977. In
the
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2007,
Sweden
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 and
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UK
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the UK
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were
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still reduced
the
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their
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emission
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emissions
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 of carbon dioxide, but the
UK
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 were the
highst
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highest
 as usual.
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, Portugal experienced a different situation
which
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, which
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inceased
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increased
emission
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emissions
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 as before,
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 though it has been a little eased.
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,
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Italy tended to be stable at
last
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 In summary,
while
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 the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 saw declining
emissions
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 after their respective peaks, Italy and Portugal experienced substantial increases, narrowing the gap between the four nations by the end of the period.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, sweden, uk, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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