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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
digram
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diagram
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 the map of the
city
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 of Brandfield and two potential locations to build a new shopping mall.
Overall
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, a railway is constructed throughout the
city
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 and two main
road
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roads
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 alongside
with
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a river. The first site is s1
loctaed
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located
 near
residential
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a residential
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 area
in
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on
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 the north
side
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 of the
city
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.
In contrast
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 to the second proposed site, which is located
in
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on
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 the south-east
side
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. The first proposed site for the new shopping mall building is relatively surrounded by
river
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the river
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in
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on
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east
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the east
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side
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 and the main road
in
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on
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 the north
side
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 of the
city
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as well as
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 the railway
in
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on
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 the south
side
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.
Also
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 is near the housing estate from the north
side
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 and the
city
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 centre in the south.
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, a huge golf course and
park
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a park
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in
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on
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 the west
side
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. The second potential
side
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 is called S2, which is in the south-east of the
city
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 near the industrial estate. The notable thing
in
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is
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 the second
side
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it
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apply
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is far from the river and only surrounded
from
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by
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railway
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the railway
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in
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on
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 the south-east
side
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 and the main road
in
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on
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 the south-west
side
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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