The use of cell phones (mobiles phones) has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the widespread use of cell phones (mobile phones)? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's world. The usage of smartphones

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increased both businesses and personal use. Some people believe that

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rate of using technology benefits humans,

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others argue.

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essay will discuss both sides and give my own opinion. On one hand, many people think that using smartphones

beneficial

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for

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every aspect of life,

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maps, cloud checking apps and many apps which are useful for society daily basis.

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Your introduction is not clear. Make sure to state your main points clearly in the introduction.

coherence and cohesion

Use clear paragraphs to separate ideas. Each paragraph should have one main idea.

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Add more details and examples to support your points. This will help make your ideas stronger.

coherence and cohesion

Check your grammar and spelling. Some sentences are hard to understand because of mistakes.

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You have chosen an interesting topic that is relevant to many people.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

71 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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More people shop, work and communicate via the internet instead of face-to-face communication. Is it positive or negative?

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