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Band 5

Map showing changes in the Lakeside area from 2000 to 2009

The diagram illustrates the changes that took place in a lakeside
area
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 between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
area
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 saw an increase in facilities to support residents, alongside significant industrial expansion.
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, the woodland
area
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 was reduced by half to accommodate new buildings and infrastructure. Starting from the top-left corner, the residential
area
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 remained unchanged.
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, the derelict warehouses and an old town nearby were demolished to make way for a new car park and office buildings. Moving south of the residential
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, the original arts centre was replaced by a multi-screen cinema, and the school to the right was reduced in size. The second residential
area
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 was transformed into a shopping centre. In the southern part of the lakeside, to the east, the old industrial complex was expanded, occupying half of the original woodland. By 2009, the lake located at the
center
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 of the woodland had disappeared and was replaced by a small pond.
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, the residential
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 in the far south was removed to allow for the
further
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 expansion of the industrial complex.

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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
Add a conclusion that sums up the main changes or highlights of the map.
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Good use of details to describe the changes in different areas.
coherence and cohesion
Clear introduction providing an overview of the main changes.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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