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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You work at home a d have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your lettee Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your work Say waht you want the shop or compny to do?

Dear Sir , I am writing
this
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 letter to express my deep grievance about a
laptop
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 that was purchased from your prestigious shop
however
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, unfortunately, it is not working efficiently and it is causing disruption in my work . I bought a grey colour Apple
laptop
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 on May 25 and the bill number is 765447 . It has been a month since my
laptop
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creating
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created
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problem
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the problem
a problem
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. It has older
version
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 of
softwares
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software
 like MS Word and PowerPoint and I am unable to show the presentations at my workplace
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 , I felt frustrated.
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, there is a small crack on the Webcam because of that during Zoom meetings my picture looks blurry. I want to request you to please send a technician who can replace the defective equipment with
brand
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a brand
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 new
laptop
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. I am available at home in the morning for
rest
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the rest
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 of the week . I hope
this
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 problem will be addressed at its earliest and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear paragraphs for each main point.
task achievement
Add more details about how the laptop problem affects your daily work.
task achievement
Use a more polite tone when making your request.
task achievement
You clearly stated the problem with the laptop.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear beginning, middle, and end.
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