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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart given illustrates
comparison
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the comparison
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 of individual joining four sports in different nations from 1985 to 2005. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the data on rugby saw
an
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a
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 downward trend,
whereas
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 a reverse pattern could be seen in the figures for
that
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apply
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of
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tennis. The other categorise, unaltered over the
surveryed
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surveyed
 period. In 1985, the proportion of rugby was
hightest
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highest
 at about 249. Meanwhile, the percentage of players
tennis
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in tennis
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 and basketball was lower at around 150 and 98, respectively. Badminton,
however
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, accounted for the lowest value, at only 53. In the following years, the data on people joining
in
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rugby witnessed a significant decrease from about 225 in 1990 to 50 in 2005.
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, there was a consistent growth in the number of people taking part in tennis, from 175 in 1990 to 230 in 2005,
while
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basketball’s
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basketball
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 players rose from 95 in 1990 to 97 in 2005. In the meantime, the individual
plays
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who played
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 between 1990 and 2005 experienced a climb in the rate of
badminton’s
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badminton
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 players
at
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to
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 50 in
final
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the final
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 years.

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