One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new business. Write a letter to reply to your friend's offer. In you letter give your opinion of your friend's business idea tell him whether or not you have decided to accept his offer and explain your reasons for this decision

Dear John, How is it going? I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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letter in response to your email which I received
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night. I am absolutely thrilled that you want to be partners with me on a new business. I think
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a brilliant idea to open a new gym in Istanbul
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since there are not enough gyms at present. As I said, I like your idea and I am really excited about it.
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, I am not qualified to start and run a new business yet.
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, I love my current job which offers quite a high salary to me.
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, I have to decline your kind offer. Thank you for your understanding and I wish you the best in your future business. Best wishes, James

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task achievement
Good job on expressing excitement about the business idea! Try to elaborate a bit more on your thoughts about the gym and its potential.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your letter is clear and easy to follow. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
positive
You expressed your opinion clearly and politely.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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