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Band 3.5

Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that many
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concerns
 were
rasied
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raised
 about the improvement
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 our planet.
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 many people
beliefe
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believe
 that the enhancing measures are only can be done by the authorities and large companies. In my
opinin
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opinion
, I disagree with the previous statement. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons why.
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 with, small actions make significant changes
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 as individuals who volunteer to collect plastic items from the beach,
this
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 tiny action prevented a huge amount of waste
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 deep
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 the sea and
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 the
seelife
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sea
. Another point to consider,
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 awareness of
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society should be increased about
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climate change, types of
pollutions
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pollution
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 and global warming as their behaviours could be changed to more eco-friendly actions.
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,
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society
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may
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 start using more recyclable products
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 paper bags
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 of plastic bags.
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, a considerable difference is possible by gathering a small group of people who
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 about the environment and take proactive steps regarding our planet,
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, the group could be sponsored by private companies.
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, in Saudi Arabia, there is a community
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 of ten divers who dive
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 a weekly
bases
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basis
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 to remove trash and other unwanted wastes under the sea. In conclusion, despite the population has different points of view, in my
opinin
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opinion
, I consider that every individual should pay attention to our land, either by preventing harmful activities or by enhancing the quality of the environment.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to introduce your ideas more clearly in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to help the reader follow your argument.
task achievement
Check spelling and grammar to improve clarity, such as 'concerns,' 'belief,' and 'opinion.'
task achievement
You provided good examples of individual actions that can help the environment.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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