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Nowadays, many people choose to work remotely from home instead of commuting to the office every day. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working from home?

Nowadays, a lot of people prefer to
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home
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, I think online working has both
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 of advantages and
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disadvantages
this
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 essay will explain both sides. First of all, working remotely without going to the office has some benefits
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in
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 the streets would be
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less
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, I need at least
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work
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 usually
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because
 normally all the
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employ
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 offices by 8AM maximum,
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mean
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 that all of those people must be on
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way
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 to
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 at the same
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time
 which lead to
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crowded
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 working from
home
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 has disadvantages
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, like some people would take it as a holiday, as long as there is no
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manager
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, working from offices nearby your coworkers has many advantages like, asking them about information that you
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stock
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 help with a project they would be there for you,
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furthermore
, there is
one
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 more important thing about it, which is always going to be
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one
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making
 sure that everyone is
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finishing
 the tasks they
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 on time, but even that, there is some disadvantages for being
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site
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,
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 if you
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 your
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 early you can not leave
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before
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site
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 normally needs a
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specific
 hours to be there. To wrap up, working from
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 or being on
site
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 has two sides, a good thing
for
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about
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 working from
home
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there
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 is no more
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, and
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there
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 is no
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 around you, the same thing
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applies
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 it is a good thing that you will find help if you need it but the bad thing about it, it could be a west of time sometimes.

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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
Provide specific examples to support your points. This makes your ideas stronger and shows you understand the topic better.
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Check your spelling and grammar. Some words are misspelled, which can confuse the reader.
task achievement
You have explained both sides of working from home and in the office, which is important for this topic.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • flexible working hours
  • work-life balance
  • commute
  • productivity
  • job satisfaction
  • talent pool
  • geographical diversity
  • cost savings
  • isolation
  • team cohesion
  • collaboration
  • overwork
  • burnout
  • financial benefits
  • environmental benefits
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