The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
illustrates
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the data on three age groups of the citizens of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
It is clear that
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,
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Yemen had the largest
number
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of young people and the lowest
number
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of old people. In the far
future
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future,
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the percentage of children will increase to over half and youths will decrease. Italy had the biggest figure
of
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new generations but the percentage
expected
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to
fill
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fall
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down in 2050.
To begin
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with
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the proportion of age groups 15-59 was the highest in Yemen at around 50 per
cent
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.
While
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the
number
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will suddenly
declined
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to almost 37% in 2050. In 2000, the
aged
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age
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group from 0 to 14 was 46 per
cent
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and
group
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the group
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aged
from
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apply
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60+ was the smallest circle at just 3 per
cent
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. In 2050, older individuals will slightly
growth
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to 5.7 per
cent
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while
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children will increase dramatically to 57
percent
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per cent
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. In 2000, the largest circle was aged groups 15-59 at 61 per
cent
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.
Whereas
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the lowest percentage was people from 60 and over at 14.3 per
cent
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. In 2050, the expected
number
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for
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of
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young individuals
were
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was
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46 per
cent
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and the
percentages
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percentage
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for
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of
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older
will
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individuals would
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be 11.5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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