In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?n?

In today's world, the government
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money
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the art community. Some people believe that spending
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things like drawing
doesn't
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worth
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others argue that, we need to put
money
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to
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other aspects.
This
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essay will discuss both sides and give my opinion. In today's world, the government
investing
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invests
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money
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to
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in
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the art community. Some people believe that spending
money
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to
Change preposition
on
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things like drawing
doesn't
Verb problem
isn't
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worth
Correct word choice
worthwhile
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while
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others argue that, we need to put
money
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to
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into
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other aspects.
This
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essay will discuss both sides and give my opinion.

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task achievement
Your essay lacks clear supporting points. Make sure to include examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow of your essay. Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your introduction is clear. Rephrase your question better and make your opinion clear from the start.
task achievement
You identified a relevant topic and presented both sides of the argument, which is good.
coherence and cohesion
Your intention to give an opinion is clear, which is a positive aspect.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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