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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates a comparative analysis of
air
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pollutants
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 in the UK
according to
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the
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apply
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four distinct ways - namely
transport
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, industry, total
air
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pollutants
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, and households - between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, the industry demonstrated the dominant source throughout the period.
While
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 figures for
transport
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 only remained stable,
other
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the other
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 two sources
had
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experienced a declining trend. In 1990,
air
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pollutants
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 from the industry showed the highest value at around 5.5
million
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tonnes
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, but it had slightly reduced to 5
million
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tonnes
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, followed by a huge drop to 3
million
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tonnes
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 before again showing a slight decline.
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, both
households
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household
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 and
transport
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air
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 pollutant
level
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levels
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was
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were
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 around 1
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990. But,
while
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 figures for
transport
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was
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were
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 identical at approximately 1
million
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tonnes
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, figures for households had reduced drastically to near zero value by 2005.
According to
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 data,
total
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the total
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air
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pollutants
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 level
also
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 decreased from 7
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990 to
3million
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3 million
tonnes
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 by 2005.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, transport, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • graph
  • data
  • sources
  • transportation
  • industry
  • domestic
  • trends
  • reduction
  • government policies
  • public awareness
  • comparison
  • significant
  • changes
  • environmental impact
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