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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
The line chart shows the
change
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of
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in
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 average prices of three metals monthly, including nickel, copper, and
zinc
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 in 2014
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, the
change
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 in
price
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 of kind of each metal in the line chart almost
have
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apply
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the same trend, they
felt
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fell
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 down from January to
June
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,
kept on
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remained
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 stable in
next
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the next
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 4
month
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months
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, and increased from October to December. All three kinds of metals were
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dropped
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 from January to
June
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. The
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percent
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per cent
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change
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 of Nickel’s
price
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 plummeted from the peak in January which was 6
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percent
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per cent
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 to the lowest point in
June
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 which was -3
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percent
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per cent
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. The
change
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 in
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price
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the price
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 of
zinc
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 was different
with
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from
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 others, it
grown
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grew
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 to 3
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percent
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per cent
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,
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apply
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 and dropped in
next
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the next
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 4
month
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months
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. From
June
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 to October, the
change
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 in prices of copper and
zinc
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 were both stable, only nickel
was
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apply
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rose from -3
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percent
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per cent
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 to -1
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percent
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per cent
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. After October, the
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percent
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per cent
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change
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 in
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price
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the price
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 of copper, nickel, and
zinc
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were continue
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continued
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increased
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to increase
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 until December.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, zinc, price, june, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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