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The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates changes in the proportion of
people
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 from different
age
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groups
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 who used 3 types of media to get daily news in a specific country in the year 2011.
Micro blogging
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 is the one used the most for the 2 younger categories,
this
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 method was used by 80% of the
people
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 in these 2 cohorts.
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, from
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 point on, the proportion declined with
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, reaching its lowest at the
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 of over 65, when only 10% of
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 used it. About 95% of the three middle
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groups
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 preferred to use the radio than the others.
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 the elderly used
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 type of media at a high level, the youngest
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 group used the least in
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 media, at 87% compared to 40%. Regarding social networks, it was the one that had the lowest number of users. The highest percentage at 25%
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 for
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 the
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 of 18-29 and the second belonged to the youngest cohort lower than the previous one by 5%. Meanwhile, the other 3
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groups
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 with 15%, 5% and 2% of the
people
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 in each group rarely use it. In general, all
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groups
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 had their own way of catching the daily news, but the percentage of
people
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 who used the radio was much higher than the others.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, groups with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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