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Band 4

Some say that due to heavy traffic, governments need to build more roads in metropolitan cities, while others argue this is not the right solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, the
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 rate of traffic causing many problems. Some people think that
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the
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society
need
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 to create more pathways.
Other
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Others
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 argue that
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 it can't be fixed
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 that way.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides and give my own opinion
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On
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 of
main
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 causes of that problem is that, the
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 rate of cars To solve
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 problem, In conclusion, both sides have strong arguments.
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However
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 I believe that
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 the government need to take control
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Make sure to fully answer all parts of the question. Explain your opinion clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your ideas better. Use clear paragraphs for each main point.
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Provide specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger.
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You introduced the topic and stated your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes your view.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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