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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart
iilustrates
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illustrates
 the
chaning
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changing
 patterns of
air
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 pollution sources in the
uk
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UK
 over a 15-year
period
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 from 1990 to 2005. The
infomation
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information
 is presented in
million
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tonnes
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.
Overall
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, the most striking feature of the given graph is that total
air
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 pollutant and industry shows a downward trend,
whereas
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 the other two sources
displays
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display
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steady
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a steady
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 trend. A brief look at the data reveals that in 1990 total
air
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pollutant
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pollutants
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has
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had
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 the highest
air
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 pollution of around 8
million
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tonnes
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 but over the next nine years there was a significant decrease from 8
million
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tonnes
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 to 4
millon
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million
tonnes
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.
However
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, during the
last
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quater
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quarter
 of the graph shows that remains steady
then
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began
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begins
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 to fall again.
In contrast
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, industry produces over 5
million
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tonnes
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 of
air
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pollutant
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pollutants
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 within the next three
year
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years
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.
However
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, for the next
12 year
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12-year
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period
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 there is
gradual
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a gradual
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 decrease to
2million
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2 million
tonnes
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. Delving into
futher
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further
 details over the
15 year
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15-year
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period
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 the
air
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 pollution from transportation remains the same.
Similarly
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, the
period
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 between 1990 to 2005
also
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under went
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underwent
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 a marginal decline in the figures
of
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for
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household
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households
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 to approximately
o
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one
million
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tonnes
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, period, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • graph
  • data
  • sources
  • transportation
  • industry
  • domestic
  • trends
  • reduction
  • government policies
  • public awareness
  • comparison
  • significant
  • changes
  • environmental impact
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