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Nowadays, people are able to use the internet to do an increasing number of tasks. Is this a positive or negative development?

Recently, a growing number of
people
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 believe that the
internet
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it
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is
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 so crucial for a lot of communities in the world, particularly, to help many societies to easily do anything
such
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 as exams or others.
Firstly
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, In the modern era, a large number of
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communities
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 argue that the technology like
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 gives a variety of crowd merit, because, they feel exhilarated
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 the development of technology recently.
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, many universities abroad
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 use the
internet
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 to study, because they argue that learning on the
internet
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 is simple and practical
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 because all young
people
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 can improve their skills on the
internet
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.
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, a student from China makes
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high applications for
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a laptop
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 using the
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.
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, they made a robot. From my perspective,
people
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 will be able to use the
Internet
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 in 2025, because
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 different from a long time ago when
people
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 not have
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Internet
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the Internet
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 and always did an increasing number of tasks manually and could not grow their skills and knowledge.
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,
this
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 has a positive impact on humans and how they can grow quickly with the current development. In conclusion, doing anything using the
internet
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 is much more fun and effective. And
then
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, do not forget to use the
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, because the
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 sometimes dangerous
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 more
people
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 sometimes using the
internet
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 to open bad websites.
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, the community uses the
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 for online gambling.

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task achievement
The introduction needs to clearly state your opinion about whether using the internet is a positive or negative development.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that supports your argument. Use more examples and details.
coherence and cohesion
In the conclusion, restate your main points and give a final thought about the internet's impact.
coherence and cohesion
Check your sentences for grammar and spelling to improve clarity and make your ideas easier to understand.
task achievement
You have included examples of how the internet helps students, which is a good point to support your view.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionized
  • unprecedented
  • convenience
  • efficiency
  • remote work
  • democratization of information
  • geographical constraints
  • overreliance
  • impulse buying
  • financial stress
  • compromise
  • data security
  • detrimental
  • face-to-face interactions
  • physical presence
  • accessing
  • engaging
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