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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

in
this
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 globalisation era. food has become the most important aspect that
sholud
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should
 we maintain as a good choice
espesially
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especially
meat
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 or
fish
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 which has many
kind
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kinds
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 of
benefit
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benefits
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. some people
thing
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think
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no
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not
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eat
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eating
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meat
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 or
fish
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 is better
to
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than
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staying
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stay
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healty
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healthy
. others thing, it
is only has
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only has
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 benefits for words as a whole. from
that
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that,
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i
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I
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 will di some people can not eat
meat
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 or
fish
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 because it has bad
effect
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effects
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for
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on
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the body
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body
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body's
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healty
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health
.
firstly
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,
by
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apply
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eating
eat
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meat
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 or
fish
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 can
be
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cause
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 the temperature of our blood will be higher because it has
high
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a high
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precentage
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percentage
 of blood pressure.
for instance
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, eating ship
meet
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meat
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 or cow.
secondly
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,
Meat
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 or
fish
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 are habitats in the rivers or sea that makes it
unhealty
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unhealthy
to
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for
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cosumption
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consumption
 because
mostly
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most
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 people throw rubbish on the river or sea beside it has
most
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the most
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 benefit for the
word
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world
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 because it
become
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becomes
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valuable
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a valuable
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 aspect
to
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of
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make
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creating
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 a good
athmosphire
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atmosphere
.

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task achievement
Your introduction is unclear. Start with a clear statement of the topic and your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
task achievement
Support your points with clear examples or explanations. This will strengthen your argument.
task achievement
You raised relevant points about health and environment.
coherence cohesion
You addressed both sides of the argument, which is good.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Plant-based diet
  • Chronic diseases
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Deforestation
  • Water consumption
  • Mitigate climate change
  • Natural resources
  • Animal welfare
  • Humane and ethical choice
  • Healthcare costs
  • Sustainable farming
  • Legumes
  • Fruits and vegetables
  • Vegetarian
  • Vegan
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