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A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets plenty of exercise and avoids stress. What should people do to stay healthy in your country? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
Nowdays
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,
The
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apply
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most people in my county
was
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are
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 influenced
about
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by
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healty
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healthy
activities
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, because
self awareness
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self-awareness
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increase
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increased
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post pandemic
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 Covid 19. because of
this
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pandemic
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pandemic,
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the
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apply
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most people are
stay
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staying
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healty
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healthy
on
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in
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 their
activities
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.
In
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this
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 essay, will be
desribe
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described
describe
 about
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healthy
healty
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healthy
activities
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for
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, for
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 instance, Running, Healing, and Diet
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, in
indonesia
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Indonesia
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 running is the best choice for
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healty
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healthy
activities
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. Runnis
its
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is
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simple
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a simple
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 exercise to
workout
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work
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 in daily
activities
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 and
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is afordable
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afordable
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affordable
,
moreover
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,
down
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it down
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 the fat
body
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 and
best
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is best
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 for cardiovascular.
esspesialy
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especially
,
this
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excercise
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exercise
 is flexible to
doing
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 every day like in the morning, evening, or night.
Body paragraph 2
Secondly
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, after that to make
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body
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the body
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healty
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healthy
 is healing. Healing is the
importan
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important
 part
to increase
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of increasing
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 the
emotion
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emotional
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feel
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feels
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 good.
this
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 is the key
of control
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to controlling
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 stress every day.
in
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religion
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the religion
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 of
islam
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Islam
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 called Dzikir. Dzikir is
sit
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not sitting
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 down anymore for 3
until
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to
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 10 minutes.
this
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 is
usefull
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useful
 to reduce anxiety,
stess
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stress
 of emotions, and burnout.
Body paragraph 3
The most
importan
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important
 about
this
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 is Diet. real food is the component of regerations of
cell
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cells
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 in our
body
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. the regenerations of
sell
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sales
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 involve
to
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apply
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fresh food and good
bavarage
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beverage
beverages
.
this
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 is the key
of
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to
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body
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healty
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health
.
Conclusion
summary of
that is
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 to make our
body
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healty
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healthy
 is easy to do like running, healing and diet eat real food and
bavarage
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beverage
beverages
.

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coherence
Try to organize your ideas clearly. Use paragraphs to separate each main point.
cohesion
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task achievement
Give more detailed examples for each point you make. This will help to make your ideas stronger.
content
You have identified important points such as running, healing, and diet which are relevant to staying healthy.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced diet
  • physical activity
  • mindfulness
  • chronic diseases
  • health check-ups
  • processed foods
  • mental health
  • nutrients
  • emotional support
  • obesity prevention
  • screenings
  • preventive healthcare
  • supportive social network
  • nutritional education
  • adequate sleep
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