You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part-time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

dear my friend, I hope you are doing well. I am writing

this

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letter to inform you that I have just finished my study

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the

university

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malang

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two weeks ago and I

decide

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to continue my study

wtih

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you there and I will take the same subject

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you in

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australia

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firstly

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university

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malang

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took

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an english

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english

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education and I spent time

for

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studying there for about 4 years, I have

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achivment

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join

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a turnament

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turnament

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different

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and got the first champion in

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debate,

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that reason my plan for going studying

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australia

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is to improve my

knowladge

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knowledge

about

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espesially

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especially

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, when I

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I want to take a

part time

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job there to make my activity

usefull

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useful

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each day because

study

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studying

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need much money to pay all things like

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the smester

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smester

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semester

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guaranted

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guarantee

. in the end,

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hope you

able

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to help me find a better job for

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enough

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to buy all

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at the university and guide

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everything

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need. best regards, mr.bull

Arni AqlinaFri Jun 13 2025

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coherence and cohesion

Make sure to use clear paragraphs for each idea: your study plans, your reasons for a job, and how your friend can help.

task achievement

Check for spelling and grammar mistakes to make your letter more clear and professional.

task achievement

You have shared your achievements and study plans in detail, which shows your passion for learning.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

186 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational aspirations
Work experience
Financial independence
Resume (or CV)
Local job market
International student
Legal requirements
Student work permit
Employment trends
Time management
Networking
A part-time position
Balance studies and work
Job hunting strategies

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