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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given
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 illustrates the number of
people
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 who moved from the countryside to the cities in three Asian nations between 2000 and 2025.
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, it can be seen that the total of
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 that moved to the urban areas increased in all countries.
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, at the beginning, Russia had the most
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 who had moved out of the rural areas to the urban
one
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 but it was replaced by that of Iran
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 of 2025. Turning the focus on the dramatically changed trend, Russia stood at around 15
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millions
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people
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 in 2000 before it climbed up gradually to nearly 40000000
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 by 2010.
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 the next 15 years, it
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 rose to approximately 90
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millions
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of
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people
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 in 2025 after it had jumped to exactly 70
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millions
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people
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before
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in the year of 2015. Moving on to the remaining data, the total Iran
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 who had moved into the urban areas from the rural
one
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 began with almost 10
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millions
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people
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 at the beginning before saw a slight increase to
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approximately
 10
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millions
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of
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individuals by 2005.
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, it increased these
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numbers
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 rapidly over the time period before
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 up with over 90
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millions
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million
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people
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.
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,
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of
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Indonesia started with 10
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millions
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people
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 in 2000, after that it climbed up slightly to 30
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millions
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million
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of
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people
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 in 2020 before
remained
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 constant until the end of the timeframe with
the
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 total
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people
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 of 30
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millions
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million
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "climbed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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