The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995.

The pie charts illustrate the distribution of the highest level of

women

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’s education in Someland during the

years1945and

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years 1945 and

1955.

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, there has been a significant change in

women

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's educational attainment between 1945 and 1995.

Women

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with no schooling and those who completed only the third

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occupied the highest percentage in 1945,

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in 1995 many

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had obtained a first-degree academic qualification . In 1945, one-third of

women

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in Someland did not receive any formal education,

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another third dropped out before completing primary school.

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, nearly a quarter of the

women

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accomplished

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grade

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grades

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six and nine.

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, only 4% of

women

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finished

year12

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year 12

. By 1995, after fifty years, the percentage of

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obtaining a first degree accounted for 50%,making it the highest proportion. The second highest

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for

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who completed

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six and those who pursued postgraduate education, both accounting for 20%

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The

percentages

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percentage

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women

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completing

grade

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three and having no schooling had dropped to 0%.

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The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995.

Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers; Some others believe that less control will help children deal with their adult life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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