Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some infomation is too important or too valueable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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that sharing an adequate amount of information is essential in scientific
researches
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,
as well as
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in articles related to
business
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the business
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or
academic
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the academic
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world to be able to convince the reader with your thoughts.
On the other hand
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, sharing too much information could be overwhelming to the reader and result in a counterproductive.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
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You have a clear opinion about the topic, which is important.
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Your writing is easy to understand, showing good effort.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • innovation
  • collective knowledge
  • security risk
  • proprietary information
  • competitive advantage
  • democratization
  • sensitive technology
  • ethical guidelines
  • nondisclosure agreements
  • peer-review processes
  • validated
  • open access
  • regulated access
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