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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Three pie charts illustrate aggregate
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changes
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 in spending during two decades in the special school in
UK
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the UK
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.
Overall
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, there are five types of expenditure
such
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 as
:
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 insurance, resources, teachers and other
workers
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workers'
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 salaries. Educator’s wages were the main spending during these years,
whereas
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 insurance costs almost nothing. Other expenses
were fluctuating
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fluctuated
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these
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during these
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 20 years. During the first
decade
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decade,
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 insurance had a tiny increase
by
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of
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 1%, but in 2001 its total outlay rose to 8%. Some resources like books and magazines felt a fluctuation, so
firstly
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 it climbed from 15 to 20
percent
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 and after it sharply
fall
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 to 9%. Both equipment and furniture accounted for 15% in
the
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1981.
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However
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 after 10
years
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years,
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 it decreased by 3 times,
in
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and in
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 the 21st century there
were
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 a dramatic growth from 5% to 23%. During the all
period
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period,
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 other worker’s salaries only deteriorated.
At
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 the beginning,
fall
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the fall
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 was just 6%, in
2001
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the 2001
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 year the total income of other employees
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 just 15%. Teachers wages were 40% in
the
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1981,
then
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 half of the money was given to tutors and in 2001 it declined to 45%.

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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Annual spending
  • Expenditure categories
  • Allocation
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Budget allocation strategy
  • Inflation-adjusted
  • Future implications
  • Educational institutions
  • Technological resources
  • Maintenance and operations
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fiscal management
  • Resource allocation
  • Strategic planning
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