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The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in Australia, divided into three categories, from 2001- 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
shows
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show
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 the total number of minutes in
in
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apply
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billions of
teelephone
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telephone
 calls in
australia
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Australia
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, the information is divided
in
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into
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the category
a category
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category
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categories
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.
Overall
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 , local calls in
australia
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Australia
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has
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have
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 shown a steady decline over time ,
while
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 national and international
shown
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have shown
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 an incline
of
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in
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the
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apply
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phone calls ,
furthermore
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 , mobiles
also
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shows
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show
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increase
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an increase
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 by the
end
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 of the
period
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 .
According to
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 what showing , all of the three
category
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categories
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has
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have
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been
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apply
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steady
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steadily
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 rasing until 2005 when local calls
reach
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reached
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it
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their
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 peak
in
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with
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 2005 by 90 calls and
falls
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fell
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 back to 72 where
its
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they
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strated
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started
, national and
internatoinal
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international
reach
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reached
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 50
call
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calls
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 in 2005and
then
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keep
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kept
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 increasing until the
end
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 of
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period
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the period
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 by 61 calls , mobiles
jumb
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jump
 out from 12 in 2005 until 46 calls by the
end
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 of the
period
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 .
In addition
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 , local calls
still
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are still
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 the
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highest
highst
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highest
 calls category and
keeping
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kept
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 dominant even after showing a decrease
at the
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end
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 of the
period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words end, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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