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Many think in today's world it is very difficult for people to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Others, However, feel that it is easy for people to be healthy and fit if they want to be. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In today's world. The increased ready meals
on
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 the rise. Some
people
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 believe that
people
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 can take control of their life.
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 others argue that it depends on their lifestyle.
This
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 essay will discuss both and give my own opinion. On the one hand, nowadays,
people
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 working too much
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for
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, for
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averange
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average
 job continues from 7 hours to 9 hours.
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 has
negative
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a negative
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 impact on their inside life as
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a matter
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 of fact, after
hardwork
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hard work
 nobody wants to cook
meal
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instead
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, they will order fast foods
it
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apply
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causes
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 many diabetic problems.
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However
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 there are few solutions.
On the other hand
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, the government need to
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 a lot of fitness places around
city
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cities
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 and villages. It would benefit both sides
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, if
person
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a person
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 is going to
job
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work
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 or coming back to home
sees
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see
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gym
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a gym
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 which is not far
, they
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away, they
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 would eventually access it. The government thinks lazy
people
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 still make up another story to not visit
gym
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the gym
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. In
conclution
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conclusion
, both sides have strong arguments.
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, I believe that it mostly likely
depend
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 on humans' living style. If the government takes control it would be better.

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task achievement
Work on making your ideas clearer and more complete. Each point should strongly support your main argument.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea that connects well with the next one. Use linking words like 'first', 'next', 'finally'.
strength
Your introduction sets up the topic clearly and presents your viewpoint.
strength
You provide some relevant examples to support your points, showing understanding of the issue.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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