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The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below displays the proportion of New
Zealand
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population
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 from the years 1950 to 2050.
Overall
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, the elderly and middle-aged
population
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 remained the highest
thoughout
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throughout
 the time period and the young adults
being
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were
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 the third highest which was later overtaken by the children . In the
future
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 the trend continue to remain relatively the same In 1950, 60% of the
population
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 residing in New Zealand were people aged over 65 years and the proportion continues to remain stable contributing as the highest members
to
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of
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 the
population
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 up
untill
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until
 2020. With only 20% of the middle-aged
popultion
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population
 in
1950
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1950,
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 the percentage gradually rose to just below 50% in 1990 and
then
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 decreased
with
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 40% by 2020.
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Population
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The population
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 aged between 25- 37 was the third highest in 1950 by 20% .
However
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,
this
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 was overtaken by the number of children in 2010 with just below 20% and gradually increased
throughoput
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throughout
 the time period. It is predicted that all the age groups will continue to remain relatively the same up
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until
untill
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until
 2050 except the age group of 0-14 will continue to increase

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • steady increase
  • fluctuations
  • notable rise
  • projection
  • stabilization
  • plateauing
  • growth rate
  • population growth
  • timeline
  • trend
  • segment
  • economic conditions
  • migration policies
  • birth rates
  • data series
  • historical
  • forecast
  • intervals
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