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The table below compares the income of secondary and high school teachers in five particular countries : Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.

The table below compares the income of secondary and high school teachers in five particular countries : Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Japan and Korea in 2009.
The table illustrates information on the salaries of secondary and high school
teachers
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 in five countries in 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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teachers
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 in Luxembourg had the highest income compared to other countries,
while
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 Japan’s
teachers
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 earned the lowest
salary
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. In Luxembourg, the starting
salary
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 was 80,000 $ per year,
while
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 after 15
years
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 of experience, it rose to 112,000.
However
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, the maximum income the teacher had was 139,000 which took 30
years
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 to reach it. Followed by Denmark where the starting
salary
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 was 47,000 and after 15
years
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 it increased slightly to 54,000 which makes it the maximum
salary
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 that
teachers
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 could have. It took them only 8
years
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 to reach
top
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the top
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salary
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.
On the other hand
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, Australia and Korea had almost the same number, starting with approximately 34,600 and 30,500 respectively.
This
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 figure grew dramatically to 48,000 after 15
years
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, which is the maximum amount in Australia.
In contrast
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, in Korea, the
salary
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 increased highly to 57,600 and reached the top
salary
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 at 84,500 after 37
years
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.
Finally
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, Japan had the lowest income of secondary
teachers
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 starting with only 28,000
then
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went
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 up to 49,000 after 15
years
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, after that reached a maximum of 62,400 in 34
years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, salary, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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