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The most important aim ofscience should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this sfatement?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your ownknowledge or experience,

In the modern era,
science
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 permeates a wide range of industries and fields. Given
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 influence, it is argued that
science
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 should place an emphasis on increasing human living standards.
This
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 essay completely agrees with
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 point of view, as it substantially benefits humanity. The crux of the matter is that we have finite resources on the planet. Scientific activities often require sophisticated equipment, requiring numerous funds. It’s unrealistic to host all of them simultaneously.
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, a priority has to be established. It is essential to choose those which
benefits
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 us fundamentally and perhaps not overly visionary.
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, scientific advancement
on
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 agricultural output and
medicine
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 innovation are considered practical uses of
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, since
it
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potentially
saves
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 millions of people.
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, the need
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 human living standards is urgent. A typical instance is that many who live in Southern Africa, are still suffering extreme poverty. In
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 case, we should discover a way to contribute an economic improvement; to illustrate, we could increase the productivity of land by modifying the climate with the
mean
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 of
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. Unfortunately, the sad truth is that we’re studying astronomy
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 millions on the planet are still living under severe conditions. That said, theoretical
science
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 remains crucial, as it offers deeper insight into the world and benefits us ultimately.
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, they may seem nihilistic in today’s context, as many problems intricately related to
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 living remain unresolved,
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 resources are allocated to speculative problems that may not lead to a tangible outcome.
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, discovering the universe is far too gigantic when it comes to
humanity
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relationship
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. It takes incalculable years for it to make a difference
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 us. It’s ideal to learn every discover every aspect of
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.
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 again, resources are required, and some discoveries will not benefit us. Improving our living standards should take priority.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea. Use clear topic sentences to guide the reader.
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coherence and cohesion
Review your conclusion. A strong conclusion should summarize key ideas clearly.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic. Your agreement with the statement is clear throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have good structure. There are clear paragraphs that separate your ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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