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Band 5.5

As Earth runs out of natural resources, we have started to look to space for solutions. However, some people argue that this is the wrong thing to do, and instead we should look for alternative solutions here on Earth. To what extent do you agree with them? What alternatives might there be to exploiting de space for natural resources?

Currently, our
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 is running out of
resources
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 that are in limited quantities, which is why scientists are investing money and time in
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 exploration to extract useful
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. In my opinion,
people
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 shouldn’t do
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. It is better to
study
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 the
Earth
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 in order to recreate the
resources
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.
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, by investing time and money in
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 exploration,
people
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 forget that the same
resources
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 can be recreated on
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, but for
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people
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 need to invest in exploring the
planet
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, it would be cheaper and the rest of the funds could be spent on something useful.
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,
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 of searching for uranium on other planets, scientists can try to extract it on their own, which would not only lead to a breakthrough in science
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 but would
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 make it unnecessary to experience difficulties with
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 flight.
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, there is no one hundred
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 chance that something will be obtained from
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 and the funds, effort, and time devoted to its
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 will not be returned,
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study
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 of the
planet
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 is more visual since it is possible to observe everything up close, which significantly increases the likelihood of success.
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, to extract a certain resource, one will need to send robots or
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 into
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, tracking the flight process,
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 on
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 the process would be easier
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 since scientists can travel to points on the
planet
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 on their own without any difficulty. In conclusion it is worth noting that it is not necessary to
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space
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 in the modern world in order to obtain useful
resources
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, it is better to invest in making everything on
Earth
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, as it is faster and more economical.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and is connected well to the next. Use linking words to help the flow of ideas.
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Include more specific examples to support your points and make your ideas clearer.
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Make the conclusion stronger by summarizing the main points more clearly and reinforcing your position.
task achievement
You have chosen a relevant topic and presented your opinion clearly at the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction gives context about the issue, which is a good start.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • circular economy
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • resource-intensive
  • environmental regulations
  • corporate responsibility
  • global cooperation
  • resource scarcity
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