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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
the circle chart
comparison
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 the
cause
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causes
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 make worldwide land
become
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recession. The table
illustrate
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 what these reasons affected three areas : North America, Europe,
Oceania
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and Oceania
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 over a period of 10 years from 1990 to 1999.
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, in a pie chart over-grazing reached a peak at 35%,
wherase
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whereas
other
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others
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 hit the
bottoms
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bottom
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 at 7%, europe
rank
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 the top in
three
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the three
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region
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regions
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 with 23%
total
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 land
degreaded
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degraded
,
while
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 North America
botttoms
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bottomed
 out with 5%. In the circle graph , over-grazing occupy the highest level at 35% pursuit
with
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 30% and 28% respectively deforestation and over-cultivation,
wherase
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whereas
 other hit the
botttom
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bottom
 at 7%. In the table chart, it is
clearly
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 to see that Europe included the highest point with 23%, followed by
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Oceania
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oceania
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 at 13%
especially
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 0% over-cultivation reasons in
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oceania
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 and North America reached a low of 5% with 0,2%
in
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 deforestation,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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