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A growing number of people work by telecommuting, that is, the employee work from home, using a computer and Internet to connect with the office. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working this way.

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Introduction
Recently, some companies
adapt
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a
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 online working
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 the spread of Covid-19. Employees do not need to go to the office and spend time
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 a crowded train. You can see some
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advantages
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, but there are some
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disadvantages
 hiding behind them. In
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 essay, I will
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explain
 both of them.
Body · 1
On one hand, working by telecommuting
has
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a
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efficient for workers. For
examle
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example
, they can wake up at the time before the job starts. Because there
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 no need to take trains to commute.
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Moreover
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 companies do not need
pay
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 for
a
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 office.
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, working from home
help
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 to spend time
efficient
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 and decline
expense
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expenses
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.
Body · 2
On the other hand
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, the decreasing
an
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opportunity of face to
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face-to-face
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 communication
make
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 workers make labour worse
the
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 communication skills. Because it makes it difficult to understand others' certain feelings.
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, it might
make
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 a conflict
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a misunderstandings
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misunderstandings
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.
Thus
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,
communicate
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communicating
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 with people using
computer
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computers
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 and
Internet
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the Internet
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 help us not
to
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improve our
commnunication
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communication
 ability and it might make the situation worse.
Conclusion
In conclusion, working by telecommuting is a beneficial way to work
efficient
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.
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, it does not improve
a
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 relationship among colleagues.
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,
copanies
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companies
 should choose the way of working
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 on the situation.

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positive
You have a clear introduction and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • flexibility
  • productivity
  • cost savings
  • stress
  • convenience
  • environment
  • office
  • schedule
  • employee
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