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Some people think if students are afraid of the teacher it is better. Others say that having a friendly relationship between the teachers and students is better. What do you think? Which one do you support?

It is argued by some Individuals that student and teacher relations should be full of fear
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 others opine that
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 should treat their
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 in a friendly environment. I completely agree with the viewpoint that relation between
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 and
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 should be respectful and friendly which leads towards more effective learning and personal growth. One reason why
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 are afraid of their
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 discipline. If
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 are scared of their
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 they won’t be able to clear their doubts
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 lectures and in discussions.
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 lives, with fearful behaviour,
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 start feeling demotivated.
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 they lose their inner confidence and mental well-being, they start losing their grades as well. Proponents of healthy relationships between professors make an approachable and positive learning environment.
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 could ask their questions and doubts anytime, when their
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 were friendly enough, and even they can share their ideas and points of view with them. By positive learning,
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 will get good grades. Another Consideration to support,
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 see their
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 will become successful and good citizens because
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 they are following their disciplined and understanding
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. They admire their
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 learning life-long lessons to be disciplined and fully responsible
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 choosing any path in their lives. Some
students
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 connect to their
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 after passing out to take their
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teachers
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 personal advice on choosing their education streams or their carers.
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, the fearful relationship might create
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 has a negative impact on
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 I believe the stronger bond between
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 and
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, will generate more confidence and self believe in them.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure you present your main ideas clearly in each paragraph. Use topic sentences that show the main point of the paragraph.
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Try to include more specific examples or experiences to support your ideas. This will make your argument stronger.
task achievement
You provided a clear opinion in your introduction that supports friendly relationships between students and teachers, which is great!
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a logical flow, moving from one idea to another, which helps readers understand your argument better.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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