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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table show how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie chart illustrates the data
of
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 land degradation
causes
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 throughout a period from the 1990s. The table shows how these causes affected three regions: North America,
Europe
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, and Oceania.
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, it is clear from the graph that the figure
of
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 land degradation caused by over-grazing, deforestation, and over-cultivation witnessed the highest proportions over the recorded years. The data for
Europe
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 showed the most serious level of land degradation,
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 North America experienced the least. Regarding the number of degraded lands in
Europe
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, there was a high percentage from deforestation, at 9.8
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percent
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, and over-cultivation, at 7.7
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percent
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.
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, the figures saw a different trend in Oceania, where over-grazing reached 11.3
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. The units continued to vary depending on the main farming activities of each region. In terms of North America, the figures remained low between 1990 and 1999 at nearly 5
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percent
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. Over
a
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 period from 1990 to the late 1990s, the number of degraded lands
due to
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 over-cultivation reached 3.3
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percent
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,
while
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 deforestation and over-grazing were lower, at 0.2 and 1.5
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percent
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 respectively. The number of degraded lands in
Europe
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 and Oceania was clearly higher

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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