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Rich countries should not employ skilled labor from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, wealthy
countries
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 employ and attract and
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for skilled
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 from poor
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while
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 others believe they should stay in their
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 as they need them most and help their region , I totally disagree , and I explain
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 for two main reasons ,
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 enchasing the quality of the
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 and becoming famous .
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 with , skilled
labour
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 who already come from a rich
country
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 can enchase the quality of the whole
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,
therefore
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 the
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 has development in certain areas, in fact,
labour
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 skilled employees can improve their selves on a different basis in the wealthy
countries
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 more , for instances ,
labour
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 skills to help them grow they need resources which are not available in poor
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 as high technology or even good salaries which they deserve .
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 , it can
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 have a good impact on the
country
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 , what I mean is the
country
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 becoming famous for employees skilled people and providing them with what they want ,
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, in 2011 there was a study published by New York collage it says that german has become the first
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 in military industries duo tu they employee skilled people from across the world . In conclusion, employee skilled
labour
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 can improve the reputation of wealthy
countries
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 and provide skilled workers hand what they need , the second reason is the
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 can become well known in certain fields
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 as Germany .

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Improve the introduction to clearly state your opinion and the main points you will discuss.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and flows smoothly to the next one.
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Provide more specific examples to clarify your main points and strengthen your argument.
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You express a clear opinion on the topic, which is a good start.
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You provide reasons for your opinion, showing some understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brain drain
  • economic development
  • skilled labor
  • annexation of talent
  • public services
  • investment in training
  • ethical considerations
  • global equity
  • temporary migration
  • bilateral agreements
  • human resources
  • technological advancements
  • healthcare and education sectors
  • global inequalities
  • responsibility
  • migratory policies
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