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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In every family the are
changes
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 and
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 is a humanity
based
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apply
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we cuadnt change the facts , there
is
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are
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 some family
take
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make
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 positive
changes
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 to make a healthy
live
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life
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 and there a negative
changes
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make
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that make
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 the
live
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life
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 depressed . First of all , I believe
in
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that
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 any smart person
they
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apply
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should
to
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be more
flixbel
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flexible
 with the
peapol
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people
 they love and care about because
this
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 what
make
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 families still to the
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 and
make
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makes
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it
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them
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 stronger with good communication to be more understanding and know what they need to help them. Second , In my
opinion
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 the
word
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world
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 every day
have changed
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apply
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and there
is
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are
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 always new challenges we
throw it
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 with family or random
story's
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stories
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 in
live
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life
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this
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make
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makes
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 us to knowledge new stuff like to be more
standebl
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standby
 and know how to deal with
changes
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 specifically when we need to be strict or soft .
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 but not least, I have experience with
changes
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structure
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in structure
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 because we are
big
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a big
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 family and we have 3 generations including my parents my big siblings and the youngest siblings we should
to
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apply
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be respected
about
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in
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big
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a big
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 structure and don't get
line
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lined
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 and there is some small structure we can change and get better live . In conclusion, I hope to make more positive
changes
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 in our lives to be positive people and
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 not only with our families
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also
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but also
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 with any person in the
live
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life
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 should be more standing and strict to know their line.

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Try to use clear examples to support your main points. This will make your ideas stronger and clearer.
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Work on the spelling of some words like 'people', 'flexible', and 'believe'. This will help your writing look more polished.
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Use connecting words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to help organize your ideas better.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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