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Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Take a look at the graphics and complete the task. The charts provide information about people’s travel in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided figures illustrate the variation in
number
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the number
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travellers
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of travellers
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 in a single country across a
distance
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 between 6300 and 7300 miles over ten
years
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 ( 1995 - 2015 ).
Overall
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, the
noticable
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noticeable
 point
that
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is that
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 in 2005 the number of users who
travel
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travelled
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for
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apply
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long distances
reach
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reached
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 a peak of 7100
mile
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miles
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 which is the highest point
throught
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throughout
 the
years
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. Meanwhile, after 2005
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time
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the time
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 average and
distance
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 travelled significantly decreased
throught
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through
 the
years
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 and
shows
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showed
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an
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a
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 downward trend. The worth point to note that users began in 1995 with a long
distance
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 with short
time
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. Meanwhile, between 2000 and 2005 the
time
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 to travel sharply increased,
as well as
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 the taken
time
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. After 5
years
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, the
time
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 average dropped to around
the
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apply
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half for both
distance
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 and taken
time
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. 
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, the

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, years, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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