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Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it is argued that fu rther increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce world consumption of fuel and lessen pressure on the world’s fuel resources To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
although
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 the prices of fuels have dramatically increased over the
last
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 two decades, it is believed that
further
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 increases in
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 prices are the only solution to reduce world consumption of
fuel
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 and lessen
pressure
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in
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world’s
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the world’s
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fuel
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 resources. Now people are beginning to realize that
fuel
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 is
the
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a
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 worldwide issue which is used by a lot of nations. Personally,
i
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 tend to think that
increase
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an increase
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 in
price
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the price
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 of
fuel
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 is
also
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good
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a good
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 decision to reduce pollution and move to more innovative technologies.
Firstly
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, it is well known that by surging the price of
fuel
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 we can lessen the world supply of
fuel
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. What
i
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 mean here is that most
of
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individuals
could not
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cannot
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 afford expensive
fuel
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 so the number of suppliers will decrease dramatically and it means the consumption of
fuel
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 will reduce.
Additionally
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,
fuel
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 is a harmful substance in the world.
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, it leads to a pollution of the air. A good case in point is most
of
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vehicles
use
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fuel
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 as a source of energy to move and the
fuel
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 spreads through
air
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the air
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 to pollute the environment.
Consequently
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,
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use
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the use
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 of
fuel
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 brings undesirable
pollutions
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pollution
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 and
pressure
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 to the
fuel
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 resources.
On the other hand
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, it can
also
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 be argued that it would bring
pressure
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for
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 jobs which require mostly big vehicles for their
use
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.
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 to
say
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say,
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a big construction companies
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a big construction company
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 will face financial difficulties if the price of
fuel
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kept
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keeps
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 increasing. Take
for example
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 construction businesses, they will spend significant money
of
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on
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 their savings to just
fuel
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of
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the
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 vehicles.
However
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, nowadays we are developing constantly so in future we could
use
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 electricity as a source of energy for every vehicle. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that
further
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 increases
of
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in
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fuel
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 would benefit our society and lessen the
pressure
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 on
world’s
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the world’s
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fuel
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 resources.

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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. This will help guide your reader on what to expect in your essay.
coherence cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences to improve the flow of your writing. This can help make your ideas clearer.
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Provide more specific examples or data to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for task response.
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You recognized both sides of the argument, showing good understanding of the topic.
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