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Write one of your lessons in your life and who teach you that.

Today I will talk about one of my
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father
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 lessons to me. My
father
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 taught me a lot of things, and one of the most important lessons in my life was, when I was reckless, after that all my life changed because he taught me how must I respect
they
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others.
one
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 day I was gone to the school with my
father
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 suddenly I saw young boy cross the street and I threw a water bottle at him, My
father
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stoped
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 and made me a
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 to him. After I did he took the boy with him in the car to school and let me walk. When I started walking he asked the boy to throw a water bottle at me, it was a message. If someone did it to me will I accept it or not? I realized from that time that I must respect all others and he told me
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 do anything
you
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will not accept it
of
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yourself
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.
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 I learned if I didn’t like that happen to me why I do that with others
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 If we want to live a beautiful life we have to respect and care about each other. Thank you for reading my paragraph.

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grammar
Make sure to use proper punctuation and grammar. For example, 'must I respect the others' should be 'I must respect others.'
clarity
Try to have clearer sentences so the reader can follow your ideas more easily.
conclusion
Include a stronger conclusion that sums up your lesson clearly.
coherence
Make sure to connect your ideas better to improve flow, such as using transition words like 'first', 'then', and 'finally'.
content
The personal story about your father is engaging and gives a clear example of the lesson learned.
content
The reflection on respect is a valuable insight and shows personal growth.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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