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Social media influencers have a significant impact on consumer behavior. Some people believe this influence is positive, while others think it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Social
media
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influencers
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 can promote
products
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 effectively, making them popular among their followers.
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 may
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the
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an
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effictive
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effective
way
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 to
sale
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 them to customers and gives
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a postive
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postive
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positive
 image
how
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of how
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products
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 are useful.
On the other hand
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,
this
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 might lead to
spread
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the spread
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cheap
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of cheap
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 items because most
of
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apply
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influencers
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apart
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part
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 of campeane to
sale
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products
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 and gain profits. In my opinion, social
media
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influencers
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 have
ability
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the ability
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 to create public
trend
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trends
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 about
products
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as well as
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 impacting on client
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behavior
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behaviour
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.
Compaies
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Companies
 around the world
trend
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tend
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 to study the market of
target
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the target
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 community by checking social
media
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 trends they have. Social
media
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influencers
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 create public image and trend the
sociaty
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society
 to act in
this
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way
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 as they do.
This
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 may be
effective
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an effective
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way
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 to show the
feature
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features
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 of
products
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 where
menufactures
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manufacturers
 reach directly to customers and
sale
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sell
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products
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.
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, buying
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of chinese
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chinese
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 cars in Qatar
increases
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increased
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10
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by 10
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 %
than
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more than
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last
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 year because
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the chineses
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chineses
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Chinese
make
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made
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a contract
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contract
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contracts
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 with many social
media
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influencers
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 in Qatar to promote
products
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. In my view,
this
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 was
smart
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way
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 to increase the
marketshare
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market share
 where
influencers
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 play
main
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the main
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way
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spread
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spreading
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 how their cars have features and
positve
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positive
 points. On the other
hands
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hand
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, social
media
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influencers
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 may harm
costomer
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customers
 by
spearding
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spreading
 fake news about
prodacts
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products
. They might take
apart
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part
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of
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in
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 commercial advertising and gain profit
to
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apply
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make
advertismant
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advertising
 without
takling
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taking
in
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into
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 counts how items are harmful.
Therefore
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, they may lead
misunderstanding
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to misunderstanding
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campane
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campaigns
 to market fake goods.
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, type of
shapoo
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shampoo
shape
had
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has
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 a big
compan
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company
 and many
influencers
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 support it as
health
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a health
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 product. After 5 years,
Egypt
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Egypt's
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 health
orginistion
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organisation
 decided that
this
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shapoo
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shampoo
 had chemical materials which may cause cancer. In my view,
this
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 may be the worst example
for
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of
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 how social
media
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influencers
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 impact
on
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apply
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consumer
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behavior
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behaviour
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.
To sum up
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, there are both views about the role of social
media
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influencers
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 on the
behavior
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 of
client
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clients
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. They may have a
postive
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positive
way
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 to make
consumer
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consumers
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thinking
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think
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 correctly before buying the items.
Otherwise
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, they may lead consumers to harm themself by buying cheap and
unhealth
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unhealthy
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products
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. Social
media
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influencers
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 play a clear role
as impact
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in impacting
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on
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apply
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consumer
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behavior
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behaviour
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.

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Try to use linking words or phrases to connect your ideas, making it easier for the reader to follow your thoughts.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples that clearly show your points and ideas.
positive
You have presented both sides of the argument well, which is important for discussion essays.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • impact
  • consumer
  • behavior
  • positive
  • believe
  • harmful
  • promote
  • products
  • popular
  • followers
  • trust
  • connection
  • buying
  • decisions
  • lifestyle
  • choices
  • unrealistic
  • standards
  • self-esteem
  • dissatisfaction
  • effective
  • safe
  • pressure
  • impulsive
  • spending
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