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Many students find it difficult to focus or pay attention at school nowadays. What are the reason for this? What can be done to solve the problem.

These days, there is a big trend
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focusing skills at
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. There are both the causes and the
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, digital appliances make
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digital
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book
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 are available to
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Through
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, they tend to let
students
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,
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 get some thought about wanting to watch fun videos
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 and play video games.
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, digital
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participitation
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participation
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, I believe that it is the opposite of
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thought. They can
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get
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students
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students
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, teachers
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digital
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students
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 cannot control their
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minds
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 and
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,which means
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 are the age can accept and learn things before becoming adults, so that
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is
a
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the broad
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to pay
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attention
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 to their studies.
However
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, it has two significant solutions both teachers
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Attention span
  • Distraction
  • Sleep hygiene
  • Mental health support
  • Interactive learning
  • Experiential learning
  • Project-based learning
  • Academic pressures
  • Stress management
  • Healthy eating habits
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