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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two line graphs illustrate the transformation in electrical tools ownership and the total
of
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time spent doing chores in a particular country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, the
utilization
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utilisation
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 of three categories of electrical appliances (washing machine, refrigerator, and vacuum cleaner)
increeased
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increased
 from 1920 to 2019. Meanwhile, the
amount total
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total amount
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 of
houseworks
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housework
 in each household gradually fell over the years. In 1920, the number of usage of laundry
machine
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machines
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,
chiller
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chillers
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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 were 0%, 30%, and 40%, respectively. These types of tools had stable growth in the next years as
it
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they
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 increased to 100% for both refrigerator and vacuum cleaner, and slightly above 70% for
laundry
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the laundry
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 appliance.
However
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, in 1980, the tool for doing laundry had a small decrease to around 65% among the increasing number
in
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of
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 all kinds of household
equipments
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equipment
.
On the other hand
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, the total hours spent
in
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on
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 housework tasks
such
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 as
,
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 washing clothes, preparing meals, and cleaning
,
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 significantly declined year to year from 50% in 1920 to
little
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a little
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 bit more than 10% in 2019.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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