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The maps bellow show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps bellow show recent changes in the town of Kimsville. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
the two maps illustrate how Kimsvile has changed over the time period between 2001 and today.
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, it is notable that the wooded areas on the northwest corner and southwest corner were replaced by new developments, and the old cinema has been converted into a pub. To the east of the
city
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centre
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, a factory was replaced by a software company. To the west of the
city
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centre
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, a new train station has been constructed.
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, the recent developments include a new apartment building, which is in place of the forest in the northwestern area,
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 the new football stadium in the southwest.
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, some features
in
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of
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 the town remained unchanged. The shopping
centre
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, located north of the
city
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centre
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, is still in the same position, and the
city
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centre
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 itself has not been changed.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • modernization
  • transportation routes
  • green space
  • public facilities
  • community impact
  • environmental effect
  • historic preservation
  • architectural integration
  • urban planning
  • amenities
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