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Band 3.5

In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, reading
e-books
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 has become more common than reading
paper
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 books. How
it
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 influence
to
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society and do the
advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages? I think there
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 several
advantages
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 (as
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e-books
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e-books are
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 more comfortable, it is
the
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they
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more
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cheaper and
it
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ecologically better) which outweigh the disadvantages (
as
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 a becoming bad vision or
bad
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a bad
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 salary for authors). On one hand,
e-books
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more
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are more
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 comfortable
for using
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 because you can take
it
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them
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for
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throughout places and don'
t
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 care to weigh
of
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this
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; you can read where you want and you always have some books in one thing (as a phone or special item for reading).
In addition
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,
e-books
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more
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are
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 cheaper because for
e-books
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 they don'
t
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 need to spend money for
paper
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,
illustration
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illustrations
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 or
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paper back
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.
As a result
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, it
ecologically
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 better because if society
read
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reads
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e-books
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 they don'
t
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 need
paper
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 and we can save more trees.
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, it is the worth of vision. If you don'
t
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for
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reading
on
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the e-book
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e-book
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e-books
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 you can spoil your vision and it can influence
for
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your
comfort
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 life and, over time, you might do
operation
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the operation
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.
Furthermore
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,
author
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the author
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 can lose their salary and it
have
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very
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 bad influence
for
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on
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 their motivation to write
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this
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these
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 books.
To conclude
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, using
e-books
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 rapidly increased in
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last
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 years and
this
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 has several
advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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 for our society but
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advantages
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the advantages
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 overweight the disadvantages.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supports it well.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better, like 'firstly', 'however', and 'in conclusion'.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For example, use studies or statistics about reading habits.
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Try to improve your grammar and sentence structure for better clarity.
task achievement
You presented clear advantages and disadvantages for e-books and paper books.
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Your points about comfort and cost of e-books are relevant and useful.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • environmental impact
  • sustainability
  • interactive features
  • accessibility
  • vast library
  • promotions
  • deforestation
  • visual impairments
  • reading disabilities
  • burden
  • enhance
  • save money
  • reading experience
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