Sorne people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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together by cooperating
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or to try to be better than others.
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some people argue that the key to success in daily life is to
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individually in competition with other people. Others believe that cooperation and mutual help in a group is the best option. On the one hand, there are those who
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alone
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and compare themselves with their colleagues or classmates. They are more motivated to achieve a higher level, to reach bigger objectives and to try to concur with the best
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or employees.
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, the fact that they are alone can help us because they can concentrate just on themselves and they don’t have to overthink
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other’s problems.
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, they are those who want to
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more in a group and cooperate more with other comrades. Indeed, on the road
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there are always problems and obstacles. When we cooperate with each other in a company or in a school, colleagues or classmates can help
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when there is a misunderstanding or
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when there is a mental problem. Sometimes they have a solution and they are a source of motivation. In my opinion, the key to success in any field is located in the balance between working alone and comparing ourselves with the best and working in a group, in cooperation.

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You presented both views clearly, which is an important aspect of the task.

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