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Nowadays, distance learning programs have gained popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that online learning has become popular these days.
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 it is a commonly held belief that the ease and flexibility of online
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 are, there is an argument that opposes it . In my opinion, I consider that online
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 will not replace in-person
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 in terms of student achievements.
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 with the ability to actively participate and directly communicate between
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 themselves and instructors, online
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 usually depend on emails
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 and online boards. In other the lack of face-to-face participation in online learning might affect the
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students'
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 academic achievements.
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, online education lacks
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peer learning where
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 can learn from each other and engage in active class discussion.
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, some studies argued the benefits and drawbacks of online learning during Covid19 pandemic
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 learning achievement dropped by 60% in 2020. Another point to consider,
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 off-class event
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provided by schools. It is possible to say that,
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 activities and events give
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 a significant experience and make them live the whole learning experience.
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, online learning does not take
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' activities into consideration. The same study mentioned above provided that 80% of
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 during Covid19 pandemic felt themselves out of their usual school atmosphere and missed their cantine activities and classmates' gatherings. In conclusion, despite people having different points of view, I strongly believe that in-person
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 are the essence of the learning process. In-person learning gives the opportunity of
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 to socialize with their classmates and learn effectively.
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, I consider in-person
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 irreplaceable.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion and the main points you will discuss. This will help guide your reader.
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Use clear linking words and phrases to connect your ideas. This will help your essay flow better.
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Try to provide more specific examples to support your points. This will strengthen your argument and show deeper understanding.
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Check for grammar and punctuation errors, as these can affect clarity. Proofreading can help catch these mistakes.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is good for task response.
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The examples you provided are relevant to your main points, which helps to support your argument.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distance learning
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • opportunities
  • interaction
  • networking
  • resources
  • support
  • experience
  • multimedia
  • enhance
  • understanding
  • retention
  • access
  • traditional
  • institutions
  • quality
  • personal
  • remote areas
  • busy lives
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