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Band 3.5

Some people think that protecting environment is the government's responsibility, others believe that every individual take responsibiity for it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Most individuals assert that conserving
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environment
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is
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 a pressing
issua
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issue
 in recent years and
this
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 is a
primarly
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primary
 duty of
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
,
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 others ponder that safeguarding our planet is a vital factor and every single person
hold
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responsibility
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 In that case.
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 government support is crucial in protecting
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environment
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, the critical impacts
of
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 individuals as much as undeniable.
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, I will emphasize both
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points as a combination.
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 with,
government
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the government
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 should enforce laws and
taxtation
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taxation
 throughout regions at
whole
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 time.
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,
implementation
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 of large-scale changes by
the
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using power and resources are integral part of
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 process. In turn,
govermental
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governmental
responsibility
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 should involve expansive awareness of
public
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the public
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 about the preserving
environment
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 via
the
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both electronic and print media as much as possible.
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, imposing
of
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green taxes is particularly, associated with German
authorites
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authorities
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whereas
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these are coverage
on
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 their media
to
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all around the world. Opponents claim that the responsibilities of society in terms of
to safeguard
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safeguarding
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 our planet are
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the prevelance
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prevelance
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prevalence
 of
govermental
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governmental
 duties. Adequately, many contend that individual actions are equally important. Everyday choices,
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 as conserving water, recycling, and using eco-friendly products, collectively make a significant difference.
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, if millions of people reduce their plastic use, the impact on pollution is substantial. In conclusion,
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 individual
responsibility
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 is important, the primary
responsibility
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 for protecting the
environment
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 lies with governments. From my point of
view
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view,
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 their authority and resources are significant for implementing large-scale solutions, and everyone must contribute to safeguarding our
worldwide
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.

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coherence
Make sure to clearly explain your points. Sometimes the ideas can be hard to follow.
task achievement
You introduced both views in the beginning, which is a good way to start the essay.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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