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The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a proposed new town. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates the layout of an expected
city
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.
Overall
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, the proposed changes aim to modernize the town by adding new facilities. Too many houses will be added around the
city
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. There will be
two
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 housing areas
in
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on
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 the east
side
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,
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while
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and
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 four
in
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on
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 the west
side
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.
In addition
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,
two
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 housing buildings will be introduced in the right-top corner and the
down left
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down-left
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 corner.
Moreover
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, there will be an area with
two
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 residential buildings, and recreation will be located in the
center
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centre
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 of the
city
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. In front of it, there will
also
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 be a building for housing. Next to
this
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, there will be a housing area with three recreational spaces, and
then
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 a small housing building next to it. It will be built roads everywhere
in
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on
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 the south
side
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 and the east-south
side
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.
Additionally
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,
two
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 roads will be created to enter the
city
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center
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centre
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. Parking and bus stands will be located in a small square in the middle of the
city
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.
Two
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industrical
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industrial
 areas are planned to be in the south and the north regions.
Finally
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, one ring road will be added
in
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on
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 the north
side
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, two, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • residential housing
  • ring road
  • local roads
  • commercial zones
  • inhabitants
  • transportation system
  • bus terminals
  • train stations
  • recreational areas
  • sports facilities
  • educational institutions
  • schools
  • libraries
  • accessibility
  • industrial zones
  • outskirts
  • noise and pollution
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