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Band 4.5

Write a letter to an accommodation agency for change in your accommodations (150 words) - explain your past requirements - why do you want to change your current accommodations - what are your requirements for the new accommodations

Dear Sir/Madam,
i
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 am writing to let you know that
i
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I
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 want to move my
house
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 and
i
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 have
a
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apply
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different requirements than
i
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 had. let me explain my
situtaion
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situation
, as per my
last
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 requirement,
i
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 got a spacious living area and
furnished
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a furnished
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house
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 ;
however
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, it is
bit
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a bit
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 noice because
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 have a shared room.
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, for my new
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house
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i
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 want a private room for better mental peace.
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,
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apply
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house
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the house
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 has
saprate
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separate
 one parking spot, it is occupied by
other housemate
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another housemate
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.
i
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 just bought a new car.
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,
i
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 need
parking
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a parking
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 spot where can i park my vehicle.
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, I had a concern about rent before, now
i
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 raised my
fund
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funds
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 and my budget is around 1000$. To mitigate
my
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apply
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this
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these
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 issues
i
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 changed my earlier thinking points and
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come
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came
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 with
new
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a new
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 state of mind, hope
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would
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 get my upcoming residence soon and will fit properly in my mind.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Bhaumik Vyas

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check your spelling and punctuation. For example, 'noise' instead of 'noice' and 'separate' instead of 'saprate'.
task achievement
Try to be more formal in your tone. For instance, use 'I would like to request' instead of 'I want to move'.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph should have one clear idea. Try to keep your thoughts focused in each section.
task achievement
You clearly explained your past requirements and the reasons for your change, which is important.
task achievement
You expressed your thoughts and needs well, which shows good understanding of the task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodations
  • change
  • current
  • requirements
  • issues
  • proximity
  • work
  • school
  • space
  • quieter
  • environment
  • better
  • location
  • facilities
  • gym
  • laundry
  • suitable
  • assistance
  • polite
  • closing
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