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The widespread use of the Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of the web? What solutions can you suggest?

Nowadays,
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Internet
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 has brought numerous problems to
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humanity. The popularity of face-to-face type of communication continues to decline over the years and more and more
people
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 are suffering from mental issues. In order to solve these problems,
people
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 should limit themselves and engage others in doing outside activities together.
To begin
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 with, the use of the web has a tremendous effect on the social behaviour of
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. In
modern
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 world, more and more
people
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 prefer to communicate
by
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 social media and create new friendships there.
People
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 can freely talk being on a distance
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the
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 opponent, but in real life, they are unable to do the same,
due to
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 the fact that they are used to
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 themselves from others.
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, when
people
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 constantly spend their
time
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 online, it can negatively influence their well-being.
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, it is proved that
individuals
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 who spend a lot of their
time
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in
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 the
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, have anger and anxiety issues in situations that they are not able to control.
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, their ability to speak fluently is weaker than
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 those who spend more
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 offline, owing to the fact that they usually type messages rather than speak in person. To increase the amount of interactions in
people
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’s lives ,
individuals
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 should provide assistance to each other and engage themselves in participating in different kinds of outside activities
such
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 as
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 competitions or theme festivals. By doing
this
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,
individuals
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 would gain more knowledge, positive emotions, and associations about offline
lifestyle
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.
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 can change their expectations regarding
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 world and contribute to their active face-to-face communications in the future.
In addition
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,
people
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 could limit themselves by changing the settings
in
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 their phones and putting certain
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limitation
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 on each appliance.
As a result
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,
this
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 would decrease their
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spend
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 on the
Internet
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, because they will not be able to use it after reaching the limit. In conclusion, despite the fact that because of the frequent use of the
Internet
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, problems
such
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 as poor social life and mental issues are relevant today,
people
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 can deal with them by assisting and engaging each other in social events and limiting their
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 spent
in
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 the web.

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Make your introduction clearer by stating the specific problems you will discuss. This helps the reader understand your main points better.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas, which will help improve the flow of your writing.
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Include more specific examples to support your points, making your arguments stronger and more convincing.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes the problems and suggests solutions, which shows a good understanding of the topic.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread use
  • main problems
  • associated with
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • privacy
  • data security
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • online scams
  • fraud
  • loss of productivity
  • impersonal communication
  • social isolation
  • digital divide
  • solutions
  • suggest
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